写作六大秘籍推荐之六[1]

合并短句可以让你的文章更连贯，读者阅读的时候思路也会更清晰。让我们通过下面的举例来学习如何合并短句。

例1 The glee club held a fund-raiser, the basketball team also held a fundraiser.

Improved sentences: The glee club and the basketball team held fundraisers (compound subject)

例2 Kareem opened the door, He invited all of us in.

Improved sentences: Kareem opened the door and invited all of us in. (compound verb)

例3 The most valuable player on the basketball team will give the graduation speech. She is the star of this year’s musical.

Improved sentences: The most valuable player on the basketball team, who is also the star of this year’s musical, will give the graduation speech (appositive)

例4 The wide receiver ran down the field. He caught the winning touchdown pass

Improved sentences: Running down the field, the wide receiver caught the winning pass (modifying phrase)

例5 The writer wanted to finish his reading. He did not want to be interrupted with questions

Improved sentences: The writer did not want to be interrupted with questions before he finished his reading. (Complex sentence)

例6 Kim, Julio, and Billy ate the casserole. Billy became ill.

Improved sentences: Kim, Julio, and Billy ate the casserole, but only Billy became ill (compound sentence)

截断长句

句子过长，会在一句话中给读者过多的信息。从而破坏你的文章的语气。例如；

例7 After Rick flipped the starter switch on his motorcycle, it made a clicking sound, but the engine did not start because the battery was dead and needed a jump.

Improved: After Rick flipped the starter switch on his motorcycle, it made a clicking sound, but the engine did not start. The battery was dead and needed a jump.

下面让我们来做一些练习题；把下面句子合并，使其更简洁。

1. the most interesting person I know is Sean O’Neill. He started his own business forty years ago. He now owns a fleet of 100 long-distance trucks. He never forgot how hard it was to get his first loan to start his business. He started a program to help eSAT