英语挑错,有兴趣的请帮忙改一下.本人英语实在烂到一定水平了!Look at your watch for just one minute.During that time,174 babies were born in the world.Maybe you think that isn’t many.During the next hour,over 10,440 more babi

英语挑错,有兴趣的请帮忙改一下.本人英语实在烂到一定水平了!Look at your watch for just one minute.During that time,174 babies were born in the world.Maybe you think that isn’t many.During the next hour,over 10,440 more babi
英语挑错,有兴趣的请帮忙改一下.本人英语实在烂到一定水平了!
Look at your watch for just one minute.During that time,174 babies were born in the world.Maybe you think that isn’t many.During the next hour,over 10,440 more babies will be born on the earth.
So it goes on,hour after hour.One day,people have to find food for over 250,000 mouths more.Just think how many more there will be in one year!What will happen in a hundred years?

英语挑错,有兴趣的请帮忙改一下.本人英语实在烂到一定水平了!Look at your watch for just one minute.During that time,174 babies were born in the world.Maybe you think that isn’t many.During the next hour,over 10,440 more babi
对自己要有信心,你写的这一段在我见过的很多作文里算水准相当高的了,严格意义上你这段话一个语法错误也没有,但是句子之间不够连贯,个别词组也可以改进.以下为建议：
1.Maybe you think that is not large number.(只用一个that太vague了,而且句子可改成You may think that is not a large number以突出第二人称的口气）
2.在during the next hour前面加上“However,consider this,"
3.So it goes on的so删掉,逗号保留.
4.people have to改为"people would have to"
5.find food for over 250,000 mouths more改为 "find food to feed another 250,000 mouths".
6.倒数第二句改为Just think how many more people there will be within a year!

Looking at your watch for just one minute.during that time,there were 174 babies borning in the world. maybe you think it isn't a lot. during the next hour,there will be over 10440 babies born on th...

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Looking at your watch for just one minute.during that time,there were 174 babies borning in the world. maybe you think it isn't a lot. during the next hour,there will be over 10440 babies born on the earth.
so it goes on,hour after hour. one day,people will have to find food for ove 250,000mouths. Just thinking how much there will be in one year! what will happen in one hundred years?
望采纳！谢谢

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