帮我改下英语作文,改完后评价一下我的作文水平怎样?我很想提高自己的水平Should euthanasia be legalized in china?Euthanasia is a controversial word with its appearance .Many people applaud and argue that euthanasia should

帮我改下英语作文,改完后评价一下我的作文水平怎样?我很想提高自己的水平Should euthanasia be legalized in china?Euthanasia is a controversial word with its appearance .Many people applaud and argue that euthanasia should
帮我改下英语作文,改完后评价一下我的作文水平怎样?我很想提高自己的水平
Should euthanasia be legalized in china?
Euthanasia is a controversial word with its appearance .Many people applaud and argue that euthanasia should be legalized.As far as I know not only the china but also others counties have been used euthanasia in side of medicine and punishment.This phenomenon can remind us that euthanasia should be legalized so as to people use it more model.
Firstly,as the name implies,euthanasia is a quiet and easy death.To practice the euthanasia can benefit both the patient and family.I think use the euthanasia for the patient who is hopeless case is humanity,it can reduce the patient’s pain and family’s pressure.But euthanasia should be legalized,if person abuse it,it would harm to people live,which is very dangerous.
Second,euthanasia is widely use in side of punishment.Criminal also have human right.Many criminal commit a crime is out of their will.Euthanasia can fear to the criminal.And I know we have practiced euthanasia in punishment.We should legalize it and made our society more harmonious.
To sum up,every thing have two sides,The important is how we practice it,about the euthanasia I suppose legalize it and draw up some laws to make more model

帮我改下英语作文,改完后评价一下我的作文水平怎样?我很想提高自己的水平Should euthanasia be legalized in china?Euthanasia is a controversial word with its appearance .Many people applaud and argue that euthanasia should
写得很好!我实在是在鸡蛋里跳了半天骨头呵呵
我主要帮你提高了句子的表达方式.
Should euthanasia be legalized in china?
The word euthanasia itself appear to be controversial.Many people argue whether euthanasia should be legalized in China.As far as I know,many other counties besides China have been using euthanasia as a punishment or medical treatment.This wide usage creates the tendency that euthanasia should be legalized so more people can use it.
First of all,the word euthanasia means to die quietyly and easily.Practicing euthanasia can therefore benefit both patients and their family.I believe that practicing euthanasia on a patient with a hopeless case is humanity--it can reduce the patient’s pain and his or her family’s burden.But if people abuse euthanasia when it is legalized,it can harm people lives.这里应该说举例说清楚.
Moreover,euthanasia is widely use as a punishment.Many criminals commit crimes out of their will; they also have human right.Euthanasia can be a relief to the criminal.We should legalize it to make our society more harmonious.我没弄懂你这里是什么意思~
To sum up,every issue have two sides,so it depends how we see it.This issue on euthanasia,I suggest that China legalize it to draw up laws that make it into a model.MODEL这个词用得不好~我实在不知道你这里想说什么
语法错误还好,不多
整体思想什么的不错,
条理清楚,
表现手法也很老练.
就是有时用词不当,
标点符号也要注意!