请看我这篇英语作文,然后给些指点,大一的,在练作文,用某年四级题写的:要求:一次性塑料袋的使用；使用带来的问题；限制使用的意义文章:These days,disposable plastic bags have enjoyed tremendous popular

请看我这篇英语作文,然后给些指点,大一的,在练作文,用某年四级题写的:要求:一次性塑料袋的使用；使用带来的问题；限制使用的意义文章:These days,disposable plastic bags have enjoyed tremendous popular
请看我这篇英语作文,然后给些指点,
大一的,在练作文,用某年四级题写的:
要求:
一次性塑料袋的使用；使用带来的问题；限制使用的意义
文章:
These days,disposable plastic bags have enjoyed tremendous popularity among people when they choose what to carry things.
With more and more usage,however,disposable plastic bags bring us a lot of trouble as well.For the reason that they are too special to be decomposed,the bags surely result in many environmental problems on soil and water.At the same time,due to the bags’ very low price it has always been extremely difficult managing the use of them.And many similar problems like this.
So in some sense,limiting the use of disposable plastic bags seem quite significant to us.After the reduction,one obvious effect is on improvements of our living environment,and another on the city’s cleaning level’s rise.More importantly,it will be a mark of civilization.
希望大家给予正确的指点..
limiting ..seems 我打错了,少打S
大家注意提醒我 中式英语的使用,大词小用,句式是否过于不地道,是否需要丰富化这些.

请看我这篇英语作文,然后给些指点,大一的,在练作文,用某年四级题写的:要求:一次性塑料袋的使用；使用带来的问题；限制使用的意义文章:These days,disposable plastic bags have enjoyed tremendous popular
我提几点意见,如果不好还望包涵.
1 第一句结尾建议改成how to carry things,用什么样的方式提东西
2 at the same time建议改成moreover,furthermore,因为你后面说的第二个原因,有递进的关系,at the same time更多的是表示时间上的并列.
3 the bag's very low price建议改成the very low price of plastic bags,一般's的形式多用于人的所有格
4 it has always been extremely difficult managing the use of them,修饰managing的时候应该用副词,difficult的形式不对,因为在这里manage是现在分词形式,不是动名词,不应作为名词看待.同时这句话应该再斟酌一下,总有一种奇怪的感觉,it指代什么?不是很清晰,时态用现在完成进行时也有点不太好,现在完成进行时是强调动作多于影响的.建议改成it has always been extremely difficult to manage the use of them
5 and many similar problems like this,你写的时候也没有解释,similar problems到底是什么样的problem,太general了,至少在后面加上such as .
6 effect is the(on) improvements；another one is (on) the.
7 the city's cleaning level's rise,刚才已经说了,尽量用of的形式,多用几个都没关系,'s的所有格形式一般用于人,所以建议改成the rise of cleaning level of city

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问题很多，这篇文章算不算一篇佳作：
原因有：1.措辞不准确
2. 句子混乱，且不完整
3.逻辑混乱
4.中式英语严重
建议：1. 首段太过单薄，而且what用的不对
2. At the same time, due to the bags’ very low price it has al...

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问题很多，这篇文章算不算一篇佳作：
原因有：1.措辞不准确
2. 句子混乱，且不完整
3.逻辑混乱
4.中式英语严重
建议：1. 首段太过单薄，而且what用的不对
2. At the same time, due to the bags’ very low price it has always been extremely difficult managing the use of them.这句很中国化，不地道。
而且还有许多小词用的不对
3 加上结束段
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