这样的雅思作文能得多少分?Some people say college students should pay for all their tuition fees.To what extend do you agree or disagree?Recently there is an argument on whether students should pay for all their tuition fees .It is quite u

这样的雅思作文能得多少分?Some people say college students should pay for all their tuition fees.To what extend do you agree or disagree?Recently there is an argument on whether students should pay for all their tuition fees .It is quite u
这样的雅思作文能得多少分?
Some people say college students should pay for all their tuition fees.To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Recently there is an argument on whether students should pay for all their tuition fees .It is quite understandable that individuals from different backgrounds put different interpretations on the same issue.Some people voice support to this,however,there are also quite a few people who strongly contend that government are supposed to pay for some parts of the fees.
People who advocate that college students should pay for all tier tuition fees ,have their sound reasons.They may be more care about this opportunity to go to college.They must prefer their cost to be valuable.Another factor that should be taken into consideration is that if they are required to pay for all their fees,they may be work harder during spare time.They will go to find a part-time job to earn enough money rather than stay home and play computer games all summer holiday.In addition,government is expected to spend money on something more necessary and essential than support college students’ fees.Compared to college students whether can afford tuition fees,the poorest individuals in this society whether can maintain their basic life is more important.
However,the other side of the coin voices its strong oppositions.They hold their view for the reason that college students will do more contributions in the future.Now,government give the opportunities of study in colleges,when they graduate from the college,they can use their knowledge to do good to the whole world.What is also worth noticing is that if they are concern about their fees,they can’t be concentrate on their study.They would be too tired to do homework or task after working on a part-time job.
Admittedly,there are merits to both sides of argument.From my own perspective,I side with the former opinion,to pay for tuition fees not only challenge your abilities about whether you can study perfect whilst getting working experience,but also developing your responsibilies.

这样的雅思作文能得多少分?Some people say college students should pay for all their tuition fees.To what extend do you agree or disagree?Recently there is an argument on whether students should pay for all their tuition fees .It is quite u
7分左右
读第一段,感觉很好.套句用得好.第一印象很好,我会考虑给7.5分.
第二段开始透露了用词不准和语法问题：
may be more care about --> may care more about; They must prefer their cost to be valuable.--> 不通,无法理解.they may be work --> they may work
Compared to college students whether can afford tuition fees,the poorest individuals in this society whether can maintain their basic life is more important.--> whether 的用法错了 Compared to whether college students can afford their tuition,this group of people tend to be more concerned with the fact whether the poor can maintain their basic life.
这些信息让我动摇了自己的第一印象,所以我会减掉半分.
总的来说,写得很不错.可以争取拿7.5分.只有表现非常非常好的native speaker可以拿到9分,表现得无懈可击的外国人一般拿8-8.5,表达较好的外国人拿7-7.5.遣词用句更准确更大气些,肯定能拿7.5.
祝好运.

还是不错的

1.语法错误过多，而且是很简单语法，e.g. What is also worth noticing is that if they are concern about their fees, they can’t be concentrate on their study中竟有两个极为简单的语病，值得注意，雅思作文关注最多的就是语法了，望重视！
2.我个人认为结尾在亮明自己的观点的时候，...

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1.语法错误过多，而且是很简单语法，e.g. What is also worth noticing is that if they are concern about their fees, they can’t be concentrate on their study中竟有两个极为简单的语病，值得注意，雅思作文关注最多的就是语法了，望重视！
2.我个人认为结尾在亮明自己的观点的时候，应该多写一些自己的见解，感觉你写的有点少。
3.接着我同意二楼的观点，我也给7分！

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